- Title: The Girl in the Converse Shoes
- Author: Yaritza Garcia
- Pages: 4
- Genre: Flash fiction, children’s fiction
- Price: Free (as of 10/30/2014)
A geek is in search of the mysterious girl that kissed him on Halloween, but his only clues are her blonde hair…and her pink Converse shoes.
I don’t mind flash-fiction stories but this one sounds like it was written by a high schooler. The premise is cute, if unlikely, and the ending leaves something to be desired. Considering the author’s age, the story was descriptive and written well enough for a young teen to enjoy.
- Book cover
- Writing style and concept
- Story length
- Obvious plotholes (i.e. geek could have kept searching for the girl during the party)
- ”Miles had refused to go to the party a hundred times” (opening sentence)
- “He was already teased and humiliated in school–he didn’t want to make it an extra-curricular activity”
- “He searched, his eyes darting from shoe to shoe, so much so that by fifth period he had a huge headache, as if all those shoes had kicked him in the head”